by CatBrown
present tense makes this feel unnatural, from start to finish. Kept taking me out of the immersion, despite it being a very short story.
A Quote from your story.
"Dropping my keys in the bowel "...well it seems a little kinky to me.
No, I'm not the grammar/spelling police....this typo was just to good to pass up.
At least it it gave me a good chuckle & I like your story & other stories BTW.
A girl calling a guy a pussy might be funny I guess...but not in the context of this story.
The actual story itself wasn't bad, just a bit rushed.