All Comments on 'I'll Try It - Ch. 01'

Excellent for a first effort. Your story development and pacing were great. More, please, on this and other stories.

5*

Tc

Great first story and the way you went about it was a really good idea. I can’t wait to see your next chapter just to find out what his sister knows since she probably saw Mark slipping out of her brothers room at like 2am after hearing the sounds of people having sex in his room. No matter how it goes, I can’t wait to read your take on all of it. Great job and please continue to write.

Cute story. The actual writing is a bit rough, but for a first effort it's very good. I would suggest trimming some of the digressions, like the sister walking in on the main character.