All Comments on 'Impregnating the Galaxy Ch. 03'

He has to tell the queen

Couldn't get into it. Not sexy at all. If I was Dorian, I would beat the shit out of the priestess. Fucking cunt deserves to lose her baby.

he should tell his wife and have the priestess chained until she gives birth. Than burn the bitch.

Okayyy, bet he wishes he hadn't come back to Yarrin for the birth. Also, might explain why males don't hang around the city. Finally, is he worried his wife would hold him responsible for the priestess' transgression? Plenty of silly plot holes through all three installments. It is kinda fun but you need someone to help you tighten up the story telling.

Grammar and spelling problems are back! Woohoo! Wait, that's bad...

Also, easily fixed plot holes abound. Do you read this after you write it, or just hit 'send' the moment you think you're finished?

I'll try one more chapter, but this had better get better in a hurry.