All Comments on 'In Spite of Everything'

What a stream of consciousness! Terrific imagery, abstractions. Truly a loving wife and a loving relationship. And very erotic in its own way. Thanks for writing.

Vulcan_in_Ohio..quit acting like you're intelligent because you surely are not. Likewise for this tale.

Thanks for the offering.

and great comment by vulcan in ohio.

Truly a master of words and thoughts. They both mix to make a wonderful story. Keep up the good work.

Insight diminished through pedantic rambling paragraphs the size of Kilimanjaro. Get an editor. Good effort. 4*.

after the newness has worn off. TK U MLJ LV NV

When a little one will do. Break thoughts into paragraphs, please. Other than these, good start.

I had to look up some of the Latin words, meatus and philtrum, which is fine by me, but in addition to that, generally it was an effort to read. Leaving some things (why they fought) in the shadows is OK, but also makes it hard to follow, so many things are treated in a glancing way like that.

Still, I liked it.

Brilliant understanding of the male and female psyche. The writing is good, though the consistent past tense would be a little less distracting than the present tense. Even so, very well done.

As opposed to two paragraphs saying the same thing. See, was that so hard?

Prose is about communication. You should probably be writing poetry. Nobody really knows what a poet means to say, nor cares, much.

A lot of words to not say much.

Was this written in a drug induced haze?