All Comments on 'Incest Love Pt. 01'

The opening seems like it could lead up to an interesting story but the story itself is a little all over the place. It's hard to follow and understand. I didn't finish it because of that and gave you two star rating.

wth did I just read??

It was so short. And yet so very, very terrible. I like almost all stories I've read here, but even I could only get through half of this drivel.

English is not your first language. The title had love in it, but I didn't see any love. Just a narrative of a boy and his sister. I think you need more practice in writing as in developing the story and characters. Keep trying.

I'm not sure if English is your first language,but either way,you really need to get someone to proof read and edit it before you publish it,otherwise it detracts from whatever story you're telling.

total crap, learn English

- Really, besides my tits, which other part catches your attention besides the beautiful face? - She asked me assessing me. -

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NO!

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"Really? Besides my tits, which other part catches your attention besides the beautiful face?" she asked me assessing me.

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Also, "asked me assessing me" is pretty much redundant.

She needs to have someone with some experience to show her what a good fucking is. Can't let that tight pussy go to waste.