All Comments on 'Into the Fire'

Great start for a series if that is what you of a mind to do . The set up for more chapters set . I gave it 4 Stars . As you refine you style and the story line I am sure that you will find that others as well as myself will give better ratings . Good job .

Thanks for the read I look forward to more .

tx cracker

The likelihood of her being that beat up and still noticing his body size shape and how chiseled he is, is far fetched tho.

for a first story, you did a very good job! i'm not focusing on any minor mistakes -spelling and stuff- but on the fact that you managed a really nice (and smooth) introduction to a series -which I really hope you do try!

The only thing that seemed out a little of place is the last paragraph, where you rushed to present the attraction between your characters... it could happen later, eg after he had taken care of her, she'd wake up and notice her handsome saviour...

please continue! :)