All Comments on 'It Began on a Christmas Ch. 01'

If your character is a girl, talk like a girl. Trousers? Also get a western editor to help the illusion of the ethnicity created. Story line was good, thanks.

It's not a horrible story, but the way you wrote it (the cadence of the words, as well as the choice of words), I just kept hearing the voice of Abu, from The Simpsons.

"And then, on the Christmas Eve, while I was wearing the blouse and the trousers, I began to feel most definitely overdressed. So I took off the blouse and the trousers, and laid down on the mattress in a most lascivious manner. And when the Santa came upon me on the mattress, he told me that I was most definitely a very dirty girl who needed the spanking on the buttocks, and proceeded to the spanking of my buttocks..."

Daddy daughter roleplay! have you always wanted a daddy? hit up my pay pal, five bucks a week and my email! if i get the notification, you and i will be having roleplay sex as daddy daughter! if you have any other fetishes, ill help with those too. but its an extra 2 bucks! geneticism@hotmail.com is the pay pal. and grimmsfantasy@yahoo.com is my email!

Customer service guy! Buahaha, too funny!!! Now I'll be hearing the 7-11 / Stop-n-Go accent in my head the rest of the day ;)

...and daddy roll play poster, buahahaha!!! A girl actually. PAY you to rollplay in email?! When there are a billion guys volunteering for the job on here every day? Hell I'd take on a cute daughter in person and play over coffee at Starbucks here locally in north Texas, no charge! (Well...I might collect;)

...oh! Enjoyed the story, yeah, some strange phrasing and it was short and to the point, but enjoyable!