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by Hemsley

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AnonymousAnonymous9 months ago

Congratulations on your first story. To me your paragraphs are too long and your wording too plain, a more descriptive and emotional slant will help your story flow more smoothly. Good luck.

AnonymousAnonymous9 months ago

Agree with the previous comments

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Long time reader of stories here and have recently started writing a few stories. Interested in chat and email. Have a wide range of sexual interests. Will always reply to messages.