All Comments on 'It was Just a Joke'

Althea and Ned need to burn~

Leave it. Thanks for the laugh.

Excellent. He should divorce her and take his half of the assets. He'd be better off with Cynthia. There are certain lines you do NOT cross as friends, and what his wife and best friend did violated the trust between them. He has to ask himself is it worth it to get back together with them? My advice - NO! They didn't tell the family what happened and enlist their aid until much later if at all. I'd revisit a friendship with them maybe 30 years down the road, no reason to have anything to do with them in the meantime.

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I'm not joking.

More!

i read all your stories, but havnt comented for a while, not that your stories havnt been good, i love them all , but this ,,,,, its good how it ended, but maybe a continuation might be good, thanks for sharing ,,

Love it, Leave it in peace, see if others want to do an ending unless you already have a second chapter in your noggin.

Please keep em coming, love these

keep going this could be interesting

This one is done and buried

Don't end it... Gotta get that rain check cashed !!!! 5*s

Well that went from very good to total shit to a Hail Mary pass FTW.

Fucking roller coaster that was. Well done.

I like the place you ended it. I don't think you need to make a continuance. Another chapter could be fun and creative, but then again, it might just ruin the story. Let the readers finish it in their own minds to thier own satisfaction. Great job!

It's unfinished. Maybe give it 2 stars. With a 2nd chapter? Who knows?

...but too many flaws. In the passage where Jeff gets a job at the nursery, he goes from speaking Spanish, to getting an apartment, to being a sort of foreman. I was guessing that was over several weeks, if not a couple of months.

Then the next passage with Althea and Ned, it’s all over one day. What??? What happened? Then hiring a PI. That’s several days of gumshoeing.

Then Cynthia shows up, after Jeff is already this sorta foreman, and they start seeing each other. She’s home from school and has 8-9 weeks...10 weeks max? Sure, I can see them falling in love. Maybe. So from the day this all started it's 15-20 weeks.

Then he has Althea served. That takes about a week from start to court submission for most. Then lawyers are involved send messages back and forth. Another week absolute MINIMUM. So now 17-24 weeks. Cynthia should be back in school weeks ago.

Althea should have exhausted the savings by now. Or got another job (which is not mentioned).

The timelines in the story just don’t match up to anything approaching reality.

IMHO.

YMMV.

Of course you need to continue. Just to see how messed up it gets.

I am stuck because on one hand I want to find out what happened next on the other hand from a storyline perspective this is the perfect ending .

Six paragraphs, the sixth being one of the most ridiculously moronic things I have ever read.

Sorry but there really was no point in going any further.

The Author needs to understand what a joke is and also what regular human beings are like.

1*

Greatvstory, but don't continue the story. You have the perfect ending

To be continued. Please and thank you

Please

Looking for more!

Jeff should have still gone through with the divorce. Cynthia seems to love him more than his wife.

Creative story I was ready to give a high score but the reconciliation end and him wanting a live in lover killed it.

Story is not worth continuing. If you had them sign the divorce papers there would be a reason to continue the story so Jeff could end the divorce and reconcile before it was final.

T'weren't funny, McGee! Who's got the last laugh now.

5

Oh, Absolutely! End it right there.

........5 stars...thanx...

Loklie

End it there.

Need to continue.

No! You need to finish. You have the Suckers lined up and ready to Fall. It will be interesting to see how Ned reacts.

how is someone that dumb live that long. im going to finish the story but how is she going to prove that they didnt fucks each other? that marriage is done, wonder how long its going to take her to figure that one out lol oh and this gem "I don't have a good feeling about this." rofl that made me laugh so hard loved it that alone made this story worth reading

The answer is NO!

Oh, I think you have said enough. Well done indeed!

Finish the story!

continue as long as Althea does not get hurt too much. she has already suffered enough

Love your work and believe this story has more legs to it

Really good. Don't know where you would take it to keep it going In the same vein so bring it on. 5 stars

Continue please!

No way he does what he does at the end (don't want to put a spoiler here).

I don’t know where this would go if continued but please continue it at your own pace. The curiosity is erratic right now! From Rolanrunn

And the ending is fine. Leave it alone. It is complete.

Yes.

Please take this somewhere interesting.

Maybe invite others, since it so open right now.

Some people don't get it, why didn't his wife care enough to discover why Jeff was so uptight - his fathers betrayal?

Let this dog sleep. Not your best effort. I generally love your stories but this one felt a little flat. Looking forward to your next one.

Great story. You can end it or continue, that’s your decision.

Nice sharp twist.

The story about a boy who joked about a wolf prowling around several times.... before it really came around and ate his ass. How many jokes will she tell before Ned eats her?????

deserves one more chapter for closure... 5*'s

I want to see Althea and Cynthia be Jeff's co-wives. And maybe Ned can participate after being castrated, hmmmm?

Liked it. Another chapter? Maybe, if you can keep it original as the first.

Difficult, viewing from the cheap seats but I have read your other submissions and I believe it is within your ability.

HAHAHAHA!!!!!! The ending sealed a 5*

While the horse is still standing and not dead

End it here

No reason to go further. 5 stars

Since he tore up the divorce papers he must have some other plan besides the auxiliary wife part. I think His wife has suffered enough for her stupidity. Ned is the one that needs to be punished, banished, etc.

end it

I don't care for stories that need reader approval to continue or not. You either have more to write or you don't. If you do, write it, if you don't, don't try to force it.

I’d leave it ending there, sometimes it’s the better option! Nice story

Leave it there. You don't need to cross all the t's. good story.

I say leave it there.

No need to continue this story. I loved the ending!

I truly most of your stories.

Nice turn of the table on the jokers.

It is a tight self contained story to continue it would be to ruin it.

I do love the ending!

If I go with the fact that it was just a joke then this was a good answer to their joke and he got them. However it leaves Cynthia out. She did fall in love with him so I am missing some closure in not reading any dialog about how they decided to not get together (age? Student?) and get the revenge.

In my mind, I've ended the story three different ways. To have a definitive end would take away the reader's license to insert themselves in a really good story. But it is your creation and decision and you know best.

This could be good

End it here; 5*

I am fine with the ending, but always read your stories so......

Yes! I'd like to see where you take it.

The whole 'auxiliary wife' thing could be interesting. How does Jeff actually come to terms with "The Joke"? Is he really back or is he getting a measure of revenge?

A sad, but, fun read

Thank-you

This ending is fine. What I want is the name of the PI. With the trail over a month old, he was Able to find eyewitnesses to a random man riding a bicycle and to continue to find witnesses, as he continued his journey TWO HITCHED RIDES later? I enjoy stories that make you think about what might be next. I tell my wife that she has nothing to worry able if we add another couple wives to our marriage, because she will alway be the head-wife, because the others would be inexperienced at cooking, cleaning, etc.....because they will be so young. Then she hits me in the ribs.

This should score higher than it is. Great job!

Normally you get 4 or 5 from me Skip, but with all the 'I'm a whiny author, please tell me if or how I should finish my story' crap that has been infecting LW recently, I found your joke at the end in poor taste!

Thanks all the same.

To continue depends of your will.

Please continue, thanks

Please continue on. Great twist at the end? A lot more to the story. Althea and Ned sound a lot closer than the story has developed (may be just horndog Ned)

It just proves how gutless/spineless men have become in American society. There was a time that if you suggested something ill of one's marital relationship, you expected to get punched out - no matter what.

Now, it seems the males are less than men in dealing with others who threaten their family. "just talk it out, there's no need for violence..." - bullshit. There comes a time for violence and we are nearing it daily.

-only a few states willingly stole the election, so roll over and give them their win.

-it's only a couple "executive orders" and it can't hurt the Constitution (that we are ignoring...)

-I can go on, but you get the point.

America used to be a place of fun and carefree working for our INDIVIDUAL pieces of the "dream". It didn't matter what job you did or where you lived. Anyone could make it better than their parents if they tried. We all did better in the long run because it was about individuality and not some communal responsibility. Men took care of their families. Now, a man can't find a woman willing to share the life because her career is more important than being hamstrung by a couple brats needing a change.

No the old decent world is dead. America is dead and we're just starting our mourning.

Smokepole

What's the saying? "With friends like these, who needs enemies?"

Awesome story, as always from Skippy47. Thank you!

This one just sucked!

Bad idea....poorly written....just awful.

1*

and let this monstrosity die a rapid death.

Please continue.

End it. Fine ending.

Keep going. I hate cliffhanging stories.

Add another chapter

It's a good story, but needs finishing.

...a writer looking for interaction with his readers, makes a change from the old windbags who think we should be lucky to read their stories (let alone their comments). I enjoyed the story and am quite happy to read a part 2 or leave it there.

Thank you.

Continue, please.

@sbrooks103x

I don't care for stories that need reader approval to continue or not. You either have more to write or you don't. If you do, write it, if you don't, don't try to force it.

Always trying to get people to do it YOUR way!

into farce. You also got your timelines out of sync, months supposedly passed for Jeff vs just a month for Althea.

Should have been posted in Non-erotic. You normally write better stories. The plot idea was good. The characters were not developed. I didn’t care if Jeff divorced or not and his joke was not a good ending. But please stop this story and move on to a better story. I know you can do it.

Jeff came off as a weak and indecisive man-child. Only in comparison to Ned was Jeff attractive. Ned was a total loser.

It was not explained in the story why Jeff did not pick Cynthia or why he picked Althea.

If you write chapter 2 put it in Group Sex. They all 4 live together and you can develop why I should care about any of them. I give you credit for not bringing in Jeff’s Special Forces friends to send Althea to a Mexican brothel. Chapter 3 Ned becomes Jeff’s bisexual lover posted in Gay sex.

no follow up....please

Nice payback. Why continue when you've ended on a good punchline? Worst thing you can do is extending a joke too long.

Do continue

That last suggestion killed this story for me.

...it.

Please continue but only if the auxiliary wife isn't a joke

His response was a little over the top but the "joke" made no sense from the start. Part of me say finish the story and part of me says end it with your punch line... 5* for originality

why would you want him to come back he needed to burn the both of them to the ground not come back if he comes back he will always be a WIMP

Of whatever happens the husband just leaves and refuses to talk with the wife, it's practically every single story now where the husband isn't on board with infidelity. For gods sake, in the cuck stories that are so often derived, there's more love and communication between the spouses than these stories about poor innocent husbands who have never done anything wrong ever and were just perfect until their evil wives destroy their lives. I find it just as ridiculous as the stories of men beating up and castrating the other man but of course "they would never lay a hand on a woman" even though they are more than happy to leave them destitute and alienated from every person that had ever loved them.

In each individual story it's usually fine but it leaves with the category completely filled with cowards and lunatics with no real men in sight.

You made the point, anything more would just cheapen the effort. Thanks for the smile!

Skippy, leave the story as is without more. There are too many content flaws to rationally explain in another effort. But one example: How, approaching financial dire straights, does the wife afford a divorce attorney?

Although I could list others, I will simply assert this missive was a decent attempt at providing variety to this site.

I hope you keep on trying.

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