All Comments on 'It's a Sin Pt. 02'

I am enjoying the coercion in this story. The inaccuracies surrounding the female body are a little irking though. A hymen is not a stone wall that must be rammed multiple times to break. And if ivy is expecting her period in a few days then she is too far along in her cycle to be in danger of getting pregnant anyway. It is a good story overall though, and I look forward to the next chapter.

You'll need three things to improve your writing: an editor, a shrink, and some actual experience with sex.

Don't let the naysayer comments get to you. Great chapter to the story with the dynamics in Ivy's struggle between her sexual and religious lust.