by NotWise
Some about this felt....off. Like I didn't feel a flow from the story and it felt disjointed.
Neat writing, hot sex, maybe as much or more E&V than Group? Plenty of orgasms all around and even a happy ending! Yet I was left wanting for something. More feelings, perhaps? Everyone seemed to be so ok with everything that happened it all felt a little meaningless.
Anyway, nice story and the best of luck with the competition!