All Comments on 'Jack's Women Ch. 04'

I really like this story and can't wait to see the next chapters. #04 is teriffic and the next ones have to be even better, the story line is great, and has a much different theme. all I can say is keepem comin, and thanks for sharing.

About Darrell's Hook-Up's Dope Dealers,Gun Runners,Cop's

other Pimps and Slavers will be looking to cash in on Darrells death

and get his Women and other product back.

Could I suggest before you release the next chapter that you have someone check it for grammar and spelling? Please? Nice story, but the problems (especially the incorrect use of "you're" so frequently when it should be your) make reading it less enjoyable. (If it can't be replaced with "you are" then "you're" is incorrect.)

This was a ridiculously retarded fucking chapter. I don't get why you had to go ruin the good flow with all that S&M shit.

You had a good thing going, then you ruin it by having a young 18 year old drug confused virgin throw herself at Jack for no sensible reason. "Oh hi, I don't think I want to be a virgin any more. I did ten minutes ago, but now I want you to fuck me." It happens to men every day in the constellation G79Q but not here on earth.