All Comments on 'Je Suis Le Repas Sexuel (Sex Meal)'

Fun fantasy, maybe a little unbelievable, but, hey, it’s a fantasy! An editor would help you improve your skills. The switch to present tense part way was a pity, and the second part flowed poorly as a result; there’s a good reason why you find no best sellers in present tense. It’s ‘champagne’, not ‘champaign’, and if you use a non-standard word, take care to use it correctly so we can understand. The urban dictionary tells us a man clit is a small penis, not as you used it to describe (I’m guessing) part of a normal dick.

Thanks for the tips @Anonymous. Thanks for saying it was fun. I did enjoy writing it.