by st0rmbringer
A nice reward would be to get Jennifer pregnant for her uncle and marked up with a owners tattoo.
Hot! Can't wait to have the three of them in the same bed.
But now that Jennifer has a fullblown crush on the old bull: would she want to have Uncle Jimmy for herself? And my wet dream is to read about Jimmy nailing Jennifer in front of her boyfriend...
It was a really good chapter, you wrote well the POV of the niece. The aunt knowing what her husband was doing and joining them was a good twist, nobody has to be sorry for the aunt. Hope you write the next chapter soon
So this appeals to some, and the writing is good, but the story was a great story about blackmail and non consent and in just a few hours the girl has gone from being raped to a consensual threesome in a public place. It wouldn’t have been hard to have continued the blackmail theme and I would have preferred she struggle with the physical feelings of the sex feeling good but still hating and deploring her uncle. Too suddenly fall for him is a stretch too far for me but others obviously like it so keep up the good work, just your style is too far from kmafs for me.
please tey uncles perverted pov where we have details on there big breats and pretty pussies!!
The POV change was interesting. I appreciate the work you put into it. Look at the following passage:
I felt heat spread outward from my groin when my eyes met his. I looked away quickly and slid into the back seat. I knew my face was burning bright red.
The reader's experience is filtered through the main character, reducing the immersive experience. "I felt" and "I knew" distance the reader from the action. This isn't picking on a passage just because, such examples were common in this chapter. Reducing filter words could make the experience more enjoyable for the reader and I imagine, you.
It’s a good and wellwritten story. I especially liked the competitive part between the girls. But after leaving the shop I felt like reading Tom Clancy or a jack reacher story. I like that kind of books but they aren’t going to keep me hard. What if Linda gets too jelly and takes her to a nude beach to teach her what a tease is going to get for teasing and how other people react at such a body. Btw I love your continuation of this stories. Kmaf was one of my favorite writers from the start and you are fitting his footsteps very well. Keep up with your good work
I like that Jennifer's point of view opened up into story, and had all three characters doing some crazy s***. The fact that it became story pleased me in that it was an immediate expansion on a gut wrenchingly super erotic fantasy. It was like taking a vacation with Jennifer because Jennifer was being transmuted simultaneously through the mechanics and plot devices of the movements of the writing.
I loved it. I like the path it took in the last chapter. I hope you will add to it for awhile. Thanks for the time spent writing this story,
When do we get another chapter in this story. We need to see a pregnant niece and maybe see her become subservient to her aunt and uncle.
Echoing others here who note how great this spin on the original story is. I love the aunt working the pregnancy suggestion in towards the end (and then Uncle Jimmy becomes a hero)! I agree with others that part 4 would be amazing to read!
Great read! The idea if impregnating her is a huge turn on. Looking forward to chapter 4
Come on man!! We need part 4. I forgot myself would love to see Jenny becoming her uncle's second wife!!
It took me way too long to realize you posted that update and said that Chapter 4 was ready on April 1st.
I like how the uncle did what he did to the would be rapists. Nice ending. I'd give your blow by blow of the whole scene.