All Comments on 'Jenny Be Fair Ch. 02'

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Anonymousalmost 10 years ago

I think you should have created 3 different alternating paths/stories from this chapter, indicating the alternates. Too much confusion otherwise.

redlion75 almost 10 years ago

i think you should have stopped with the first chapter,now it is just crap you typed to have something to post. so stop now and find a different story to write.

ABSs almost 10 years ago

Fun

Good satire. a good break from deadly serious erotica...

alvinjfrazier almost 2 years ago

⭐⭐ No. This is lazy, bad writing. The subject matter niether offends, nor tittilates.

Its just bad writing!

RanDog025 3 months ago

I didn't like how it was going or where it was going.

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