by Hypoxia
⭐⭐ No. This is lazy, bad writing. The subject matter niether offends, nor tittilates.
Its just bad writing!
i think you should have stopped with the first chapter,now it is just crap you typed to have something to post. so stop now and find a different story to write.
I think you should have created 3 different alternating paths/stories from this chapter, indicating the alternates. Too much confusion otherwise.