All Comments on 'Jessica the Newbie Reporter Ch. 04'

man this series is so frustrating. sexual stuff happens but we only hear about it in bits and pieces. not to mention all the scenes where she's telling her husband what happened (the only "sexy" parts) are broken up by arguing and crying... i hope there is a new lana chapter soon, these are not working IMO

You have to wonder if there are actually people as stupid as Willy out there, with Jessica running a close second to him.

Very good story.

More progressive and very good integration of new perverse actors.

It adds to the story.

I agree with the comment below, the story works much less with only Jessica's accounts of her days.

we feel less involved and above all I think we lose a lot of flavor by not “living” things.

Maybe alternate points of view?

Sorry but this Jessica series just lost me. 4 or 5 side chapters in nearly a year and you couldn't bother updating your main? Talk about losing sight of what matters...

Thanks everyone for the comments, feedback and suggestions!

I wanted to try something different here and expand my writing skills. Naive Teacher was the first public things I ever wrote, so I needed to practice some more. My plan is to go back to it now.

Thanks, PH

Great story as always PH! I loved the dialogues - very well written! But I'd try adding a little more "live experiences" instead of focusing solely on Jess telling Will about them in retrospect. This is why I liked the scene with the coworkers and think there's a lot of potential there. Excited for more - be it Lana or Jess :-)

Good story! Deff agree we need

More live in the moment action as opposed to just after the fact watching