by writingsomethingnew
I loved this story! I think what made it so interesting was that the judicial punishment was self inflicted and in an intimate setting with her roommate and three hand picked strangers. The strangers all have control of what will happen. It would be interesting to learn more about their motives for coming and their thoughts and feelings as they exercise their control.
Self punishment is an interesting concept and might develope into some additional plotlines.
It’s a really well written story, very well thought out and executed. It makes the whole subject very very disturbingly plausible. All the way through from committing the crime to coping with the punishment her thoughts and emotions are thoroughly portrayed.
Thanks for sharing.
Tess (uk)
Great work. Love the lighter tone of this one.
The mobile phone upload reminds me of "There's an App for That" by Delta Venus over at ASSTR. I wonder if the Punishment Centers would ever develop an app like that to save time and money.
Thought it eas great and it actually opened the possibility of two story lines. Jordan may have to undergo more if the punishment was to light. Sofia now has a punishment coming as well.