All Comments on 'Julie Covington McGill Ch. 03'

I like that the parents are deeply in love with each other and they are making full-on love, not caring if Michelle hears them. I also like that Michelle doesn't just throw herself at her daddy, or at her boss's husband in the first two segments. She is thinking about what she wants and how. I get the feeling that there will be many new things in this story that are going to be quite intriguing.

Being English never quite understood baseball but now reading this wonderful chapter I can see how useful a good bat can be, (I am guessing that the baseball star named is a King among his peers.) Loved the descriptiveness and the way you were drawn into feeling what Mitchie felt about her parents. Look forward to the next chapter

Thank you to all who have commented and voted so far.

For those who don't think this warrants 5 stars, I'd love to hear why, so I can work on any problem areas for future stories.

For those who like it, you'll be happy that two new chapters have been submitted and should post Wed or Thursday.

Thanks.

M

i'm originally from Albany and was inspired by your name. You've written a wonderful story right from the beginning...can't wait to read more. GREAT work :)

living the dream on the beach in Florida

You have really expanded on future possibilities and I can't wait for the next two installments. I don't know if the sexual situations are viable for a recent college grad, but I love the opening up of new horizons you have hinted at. Fantastic job!

Glad to have you back on Lit...and writing!!!

You're stories are written very well and are truly hot.

You know me, I'm waiting for someone to walk in on someone in the bathroom!

Michelle, didn't you get fucked by Julie's husband during the night before you encountered Julie in the Smith Room at the start of this chapter? As I recall, he thoroughly fucked you. And you did seem to enjoy it as stated in chapter 2. Therefore, I was surprised by your statement in the beginning of this episode saying that you hadn't had a good hard fuck in some time. Is failure to get a cock in you for less than a week your definition of not getting any recently? O.K., you're young; and maybe for you that is going without far too long! But I still gave you 5 stars despite what seemed like a glitch to me. There were also some minor grammatical goofs, but I forgave those too because it seems as if the schools are not teaching proper grammar any more. Judging from the notes sent home with my kids when they were in school, I think the reason good grammar is not being taught is because the teachers do not have any idea of what proper grammar is! Definitely looking forward to more chapters.

LFT - great eye for detail!

I guess that's what happens when there's several weeks between writing each chapter, yet readers tend to consume them consecutively.

When I get the museum to write, it flows from me passionately, and I sometimes miss plot details such as the ones you've pointed out.

I'm also impatient, so I submit the stories for publishing almost immediately, as sometimes it takes several days for them to be approved. I consider myself a good writer and speller, so your comments about grammar sting.

However, I'm glad that you enjoyed the stories, and are looking forward to more, cuz there's a new one that should publish tomorrow.

M

LFT - I always do that, assume I'm wrong when someone criticizes me.

But now that I'm fully awake, and rechecked Chapter 2, and you're actually mistaken. Michelle only sucks off Julie's husband, they never fucked.

See, everyone makes mistakes, like minor Grammer and spelling errors!

Who was it that said, "let he who is without sin cast the fist stone!??!!"

No one is going to throw stones at you Albany, but they are telling you to tighten up your story telling if you expect them to keep coming back.

Such: "When I get the museum to write" (I'm hoping that's a joke and not a misunderstanding of words).

Fuckin auto-correct!!! ;)

The listening aspect was erotic and nicely done. I'll read the other one later.

5 stars

heyall

To what I sense is going to be a great follow up. Well Done.

Wow....totally arousing. Very well written and detailed!!

Now I read all chapters and I agree with the others, you are a fantastic writer. Still I wonder when the story turn from Julie and husband to her father, what happened? Was it not a story from the beginning, about Julie trying to get Michelle (maybe with the help of blackmailing) for herself and probably her husband?

Capricorn62 - great question. The story line did take a left turn into her immediate family, and I just haven't had time to write the next installments to bring it back to JCM.

Masterfully crafted that John and Sarah were talking about Michelle in the next room. " Oh, daddy yex right there! " came beautifully out of nowhere.

So unfair, your story makes me wonder if your reading my private journal. I'm 36, a professional with a great career who is enjoying my life. That is, until last year when my father started to pursue me in a sexual way. At first his behavior was playful and percocious and I enjoyed the attention. In all honesty I have not been dating for almost two years and dad's comments help boost my ego. One morning when my mother was doing her morning walk, I went to the kitchen early to start the coffee. I was dressed only in a sleep-shirt and high cut panties when my father joined me. As I turned to greet him he was opening his robe and he was nude. My breath left me and suddenly I was 18 again. I flashed back to the pool, and I swear I had no idea he was swimming nude that night until he got out of the pool. He stood over me and made no effort to cover himself. Father's beautiful monster hanging down, me in the water unable to take me eyes from him. Suddenly understanding why me and my older sister would lay awake at night hearing them enjoy sex. Standing over me at the pool that night father told me he would always be "there for me no matter what I needed." Eighteen years later I'm trapped in mom's kitchen as his nakedness approached me. At the last instant I turned to face the counter and instantly felt his hands on my hips, "Raise up L", was all he had to say and I was instantly on my tiptoes. He pressed his nakedness against the inside of my left thigh as his right hand cupped my breast. A loud moan escaped me as my bottom pressed back to meet his desire. Without thinking I was bent over the counter offering myself to my own father. His youngest daughter with her butt in the air acting like a wet and willing animal. Suddenly, the sound of mom's dog brought us both back to reality. As we heard my mother enter the house through the front door dad calmly walked to the table and set down looking right at me. I could think of nothing to do but straighten up and cross one ankle behind the other to hide how my wetness. I blamed work for cutting my visit short and headed home later that day.

Great story! A hot quick read - and a nice punchy style of prose. I enjoyed the dual bedrooms scenario. And i LOVED the bat.

Go Yanks!

Keep it up. :)

It seems very realistic, well done.

Another great story from this incredible young lady. I've read nearly everything she's written on this site and another. Her writing style is incredible given her young age.(I'm 67) Each sex scene is so vivid and detailed it's akin to being there watching. That's a gift. 5 Stars isn't enough

Dragonrider055

Loved it, how overhearing her dad say her pet name while fucking her mom turned a key in her brain and opened up a flood of incestuous thoughts about her dad...