All Comments on 'Julio'

"From the moment Daddy hired him to be a month ago after I returned from college, I wanted him." Her father hired him to be a moment in the past? Now, that is some bizarre stuff right there. Not off to a good start, eh?

I lost track of the number of typos, grammatical errors, misplaced commas, quotes for things that aren't dialogue and other major editing failures after the first few paragraphs.