All Comments on 'Just a Routine Checkup'

that is the dumbest crap I ever read, a total waste of time, 1 star and that was too high for this.another thing, you rushed this, no build up of anything. and it was short, thank god for that.

I strongly disagree with that other users comment. Please don't feel down about your work. That persons comment wasn't constructive at all. I think this was a really hot concept, and I enjoyed reading it.

There were no noticeable grammar errors and the story flowed and made sense to me. By default that's better than some stuff.

There's no immediate thing I'd ask to be corrected, but there's always room for improvement. I'm sure you will continue to improve. I think a further focus on the person hypnotized's mental state and thought process would be a good thing in future stuff.

Just right for a fantasy. Look forward to the next one.