All Comments on 'Kim's New Life Ch. 01'

I like details and you didn't leave any out so far.

Ready to read more, liking the lead up.

this started out as being a good series, but when I started reading number 7, and 8, I thought what happened

I had to start skimming to maintain interest. Too descriptive. After a brief description, move the story forward

So what's wrong with 'wordy'? As an advocate and practitioner of the slow-burn build-up myself, I can't see a thing wrong with this chapter. You are setting a scenario very nicely, a scenario which encourages the reader to go forward to the next chapter. So be as 'wordy' as you need to be, Janet, it all helps to make a story more interesting.

Oh I do like this. Maybe because I can so relate to Kim, but also because you sketch her out so sympathetically. Looking forward to more.

Carey Thomas found one of her stories ripped off on Amazon. I took a look at other stories by "Amara Boone." The beginning of "Kim" has also been clipped. This "author" has been reported to Amazon, but you can make a comment on this story as the copyright holder.

https://www.amazon.com/NEW-LIFE-Lesbian-romance-fiction-ebook/dp/B07TYF6SQW/ref=sr_1_56?qid=1578841306&refinements=p_27%3AAmara+Boone&s=digital-text&sr=1-56&text=Amara+Boonekeywords=Amara+Boone&qid=1578840805&sr=8-15

This story also copied on ebook kobo