All Comments on 'Kiss It!'

There's almost no context or character build-up. It's a good scene, but not really a complete story. There's more of a story to build around this.

So, I'll give it a 4 and encourage you to try writing more of an intro, build-up, and aftermath.

No tags for kinky fetish shit: 1

Next time put it in fetish. There was no loving wife in this story just an empty headed automaton.

if your going to write a cuck story use the cuck tag

Submissive to the bone.

Why?

I understand that is your first story, but even with limited IQ you would come to conclusion that you need a story with a beginning & an end!

End is ease to alter by adding another chapter, later on... but when you don't have start, it is messy.

PS: That is why 750 words stories are the hardest to do!

Tag stories properly and you won't get low scores from readers who are not into wife's sharing and cuck genre.

Stupid!

Hope he made Hal pay him a couple hundred bucks to use the bitch. If he has 23 more hours, he ought to be able to have her earn at least 5K for him.

Unfortunately there is no way to score this clap trap negatively. Thank God I only skimmed.

Revolting!

Dont give up yoir day job mate

Not worth the time it takes to read it.

Another writer (man) who hates women.

There isn't really much of a point in this, except possibly an attempt by a man to degrade his wife. For what reason? Because she took a girls trip to Vegas? Did she do something there he wasn't happy with? Did she cheat on him? How is forcing her to pleasure a friend of his teaching her a lesson? All he did was open the door for her to step out closer to home. It looks like Hal will be getting some good loving in the days to come and hubby will be on his own.

Poorly written crap with no tags and posted in the wrong category.

Sadly, trolls like this seem to be the (?short?) future of Literotica...

This isn’t a story. No plot, no characters, no ideas. It is just a scene with no point. So, no stars.

Probably should be in the fetish category, and you should use tags to prevent at least some of the 1-bombs you're going to get.

If you can't figure out what tags to use, that should tell you it may not be worth posting.

It wasn't worth reading.

One star because there's no fractions of stars available to give.