by loveorlust
one of the worst most poorly written stories on the site way to many wrong words and extra words glad you never wrote any more.
I just loved your story, but I do agree that it could use some proof-reading. The story was great, but when you have to re-read lines and paragraphs because the author merged two thoughts without finishing the first, it gets a little difficult to follow. Just wanted to bring that to your attention without insulting you or counting it against your score for the story. Keep writing, but re-read it or ask an editor to take a look at it before it is submitted. If you ASKED for an editor, then they need an editor too!
You have a good plot, but you need a proof reader to eliminate spelling errors and minor other flaws.