by SireLooksinMA
You had me really into the story until the last two paragraphs. Seems like you left me hanging. There should have been more of an ending, maybe more of a sensual ending, something that showed how he made love to her and how she felt. I don't know, it just needs a little bit better ending. Like I said, it was perfect until about the last two paragraphs.
i disagree with the reader who said that You should have gone on further. i like the way You ended it... like there was more.. but it was left to each individual to use their imagination.
her submission to Him is a gift, as He whispers to her at the end, this one melted, her heart opened, and she craved for more. Well done Sire.