by SireLooksinMA
her submission to Him is a gift, as He whispers to her at the end, this one melted, her heart opened, and she craved for more. Well done Sire.
i disagree with the reader who said that You should have gone on further. i like the way You ended it... like there was more.. but it was left to each individual to use their imagination.
You had me really into the story until the last two paragraphs. Seems like you left me hanging. There should have been more of an ending, maybe more of a sensual ending, something that showed how he made love to her and how she felt. I don't know, it just needs a little bit better ending. Like I said, it was perfect until about the last two paragraphs.