All Comments on 'Lake Pleasantview Adventures Pt. 01-02'

This was great!!! I can’t wait to read more. I love adding the bushes and happy trails in addition to the other larger body parts lol! Great job :)

kind of suck, since you break continuity in the readers mind at the end of every one or, occasionally two sentences. Next time, allow your reader to luxuriate in the pleasure of reading a fat, sentence and plot filled paragraph or two. No rating. Maybe I can tolerate your style long enough to finish the piece.