All Comments on 'Lexi's Fool'

by JulianDelacourt

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maddictmaddict4 months ago

I think Lexi has paid her pennance, for now. Finn your no longer the stunt cock what do have in mind ? How were the ratings

JulianDelacourtJulianDelacourtabout 8 years agoAuthor
"Lexi's Fool" Is Now A Full Length eBook

As per EosAurora's suggestion, this story has been fleshed out into a book entitled, "LOLA AND REX' by R.C. Daniels, available on Kindle and FREE on KU! Thanks for reading!

EosAuroraEosAuroraabout 8 years ago
Has potential

I would like to see you revisit this story and, lengthen it I guess would be a good suggestion. The plot is good and could be fun to read with more development.

JulianDelacourtJulianDelacourtabout 8 years agoAuthor
Thanks for your comments.

Thank you for your feedback as I'm always striving to make your reading experience more pleasurable.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 8 years ago
Almost there

Great potential here but the climax feels rushed. I liked your idea and where you were taking it but a little slower in the progression and the end result would have been better. Also, Lexi's character didn't really go anywhere, especially during the end event. Try focusing on both characters a little more equally next time.

I enjoyed this so keep up the good work, write another chapter and keep the stuff rolling and you'll get there.

LurvtoLickLurvtoLickabout 8 years ago
Goodish story wasted

Sorry, this was a good story wasted by the simplistic, almost brutish way it was told. You may have been pissed off but no need to be pissed at us.

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