All Comments on 'Lick Her Land'

I was glad when the narrator decided not to continue on his rant about overweight women. It was about to rage quit.

Keep writing. I'd like to hear more about Madame and LickherLand.

Wish i had an address!

Hopefully you will continue writing. Fun stuff!

Interesting premise.

But sex is so disjouinted. So automatic. So Rushed.

Needed more intersction between the clients and the provider. Perhaps instruction about what the clients wanted done. How they wanted it done. Resctions to what was being done.

Even "Madame" No playing with his cock and balls? No getting to know him? How he reacted to different things/ministrations?

Four stars.

I appreciate any and all constructive criticism.

I agree with pretty much everything here, and, this having been my first submission, I hope it's now possible to see improvement within the writing and story-telling.

I hope you enjoy everything I've written as well as what's to come!