All Comments on 'Life on the Farm Ch. 02'

it's so clean and sexy too. I really turn off when outsiders get involved in a bro/sis affair.

Author included the parents at a very slow and erotic place. Allows reader to have many beautiful thoughts of what is going on in the parent 's minds.

The introduction of the second couple makes absolutely no sense. I agree that you have no idea where you are going with this. Maybe it's time to stop.

and i like the direction. BUT - you can't be a good writer and have so many careless typo's, misspellings and poor grammar. they detract significantly from your work. if you won't get an editor, use spellcheck and Grammerly to clean up at least SOME of the crap in here.

I like the way the story is going and I look forward to reading the next chapter. Thanks for your time and imagination. 5*

-Keep going You do not need to be an English prof. to write a story that people like. Look forward to the next chapters. Double dating to cover each couples activities? Mom and Dad involved? Whole family discovery of nude living on the farm? CFNM for Paul and Ron? There are lots of ways to go. Just do what feels good to you and everyone else can read it or NOT.

I see the couples meeting up at the same island vacation, and they explore things further with each other, you could also mix the parents of both couples in and let it get really wild if you wanted.

I like watching.. not as much in the swapping. The new couple will not be major players I added them as a night out, and a fantasy of my own.

keep this up keep it going but add the other couple as well as the parents in it make it longer than 2 pages tho

A) A prologue appears at the beginning of a story. An epilogue appears at the end of a story.

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B). A prologue an introduction to what is going to happen in the main story. I think the term you were looking for is afterword.

You're doing a great job just don't add anyone if the parents find out let them be ok with it. Love is love

You need to keep this story line as FAMILY members only. The aunt and uncle thought is good for when they get back from the vacation and catch them. Maybe in the pool or hot tub.

The story started ok (story-wise) but went downhill after they had sex. See goduck's comments; I understand you would rather write than polish, but it certainly does take away from the finished product.

Great length of story keeping us interested as it goes along.

Let them catch the Aunt and Uncle having sex in the hot tub when they return, then maybe a weekend away with the other couple later. But for now let's see what happens on their vacation. Plenty of time and space for them to be alone and maybe get caught by their parents.

Great work

Can't wait to read about the VACATION.

Work on grammar

Spelling, punctuation, dialogue, etc - all VERY random.

What about birth control pills? I hope you add these later.

Beautiful love story. I am looking forward to the next chapter and the vacation.

At least fooling around a little.

Rather that having sex with Aunt and Uncle having sex with them.

MoM and Dad ok.

This is a sexcellent story. I bit rushed - from 'first glance' to nearly swapping with another couple in a couple of days is...too fast.

And someone is going to get pregnant (if they're not already there) if something isn't done about that right now.

I know I'd LOVE to have a firebush - I've never been lucky enough to get one.

They're sexperimental enough, and have been in the situation a couple of times already, to think about a bit of water sports. And anal is surely in the future - he's 'touched the subject' already.

Oh, and still way too many spelling and other errors. Most of them are way too obvious to overlook.

But keep them cumming, er, coming. I'm enjoying them.