by vespasion
I liked the premise of this story a lot, it was perhaps as one commenter said a bit rushed, a little more character development or detail of the dilemma would have explained her feelings a bit better. I felt like I got Mark and the male viewpoint really well but her "dilemma was slightly lacking.
Overall though I thought the plot was a good one to start a series, Well done!.
I enjoyed this, however, I felt like the story was rushed a bit. The progression from annoyance to acceptance of the connotations surrounding the term "slut" was too rapid for my tastes. I know that the character took a few weeks to learn about it, but I didn't feel as though the character really experienced much of a dilemma. One paragraph she's madder than a wet hornet at being called slut and a few paragraphs later she's cooing and slurping down her boyfriend's johnson like she gets paid to do it. I'd like to see more development in a character, just my personal preference.
The subject matter is a good one, though. Taking each other slightly outside of comfort zones is healthy in relationship and preventa stagnation.
Your word choice and style of writing is quite realistic. Quite refreshing story could really see it happening.
A great lesson all good women should learn. You explained it well!