All Comments on 'Lingering Desire'

did she feed him a cream pie?

Your writing style is in my opinion very detailed and therefore it makes it easy to immagine the scene and whats happening. I also very much liked the fact that this short story is implicit and it gives you a whole lot of immagination. Very good! Keep it comming please!

The story should have more tags (cheating, oral,...), so it is easier to find.

Btw: naaaastyy. Yuks XD

Great job. Loved it

Wow that was soooooo little kid story ! Maybe the children will go back to school .

He gives her is a divorce. Nothing like a cunt to do that to a man.

Well-written!

Not entirely my wavelength, but close enough that I can appreciate the story and the voice. Really a lot of fun here. Sequel?

Lingering Desire - the title isn’t explained to me by the story. Who had desire, why?

Insufficient character development.

Maybe KellyRobertson wrote a bare bones scene and left each reader to mentally build their own body of the story. Meh, I imagined two immature unlikeable people that I don’t want to know any more about.

What was written was average for this site so thanks for the experience.

Hmmm trying to get the point. Feels unfinished