All Comments on 'Little Sister Ann Pt. 02'
by dodgeboy2
- 8 Comments
Anonymousalmost 4 years agoGive this young man (at 19) the beginnings of a bit of chest hair, perhaps upper chest, between the pecs, for Ann to stroke, possibly taste? They seem to be enjoying themselves! Looking forward to more sexual adventures!
Anonymousalmost 4 years agoYour sentences are way too long, and poorly punctuated. Did you actually take High School English???
Anonymousalmost 4 years agoactually old enough to e on this site, writing this type of story?
Anonymousalmost 4 years agoGET AN EDITOR! Your writing style and grammar is appalling but the story is crap so not really worth editing.
Crap like this -
"actually spurting girl cum out her pussy which I happily lapped it all up."
makes me cringe.
OneSevenOnealmost 4 years agoLook down at your keyboard. Next to the "." there is a key with a ",". Use it.
Like said before, find an editor, this is:
A- a poor story
B- horribly written
C- worth roughly 1 star.
Anonymousalmost 4 years agopoorly written. Run on sentenances no punctuation very childish dialogue about a worn out topic. Try finding a new approach somehow. And consult with an Editor. It can only help with a story this awful
1 star
DragonRider55
bshell47almost 4 years agoCan’t wait for the next chapter.
I hope he takes it further
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