All Comments on 'Live to Serve Ch. 01'

Excellent story although there were so many different races that it was confusing since there was no backstory on them which makes it difficult to understand the comments and general movements they make. I know this can come later but I thought I would bring it up as the only thing I found somewhat disconcerting. You still managed to create a large world with many inhabitants in such a short story that it makes it impossible to not want to read more of your work. Thanks for posting this.

In response to the first big comment I understand it was confusing and i did the little backstory on purpose! I am planning for the story to travel as I write more chapters and during so we might come across some characters and share some light on the wondrous races and world! After all even though its written in a third person style Percy only knows the basics with what he has learned from being in the castle! So as he travels he will learn more!

Holy this is good more please good sir

Wow so good man please more

Nice one. Please continue