All Comments on 'Loaned to the Neighbor'

Would love to read more of Seth's journey into submission

definately needs a part 2

such a great story !

Thank You ! :)))

Can’t wait for the next installment, need to follow his progress into submission.

Thanks you

get a proofreader

"Seth and Corrine move the couch together, but as she bends to lift the sofa, her nightie dips, and her breast tops show to the nipples. Seth looked instinctively at her luscious mammary. His young inexperience facial expression unknown to him turned lecherous, and Corrine frowned."

You managed to include present tense and past tense in one paragraph.

Ridiculous.

She revealed in. No she revelled in.

Basic writing. You need an editor.