All Comments on 'Love Bug (Screenplay Version)'

Hmmm ... Weird? Not sure where this wants to go, some interesting suggestions with too many questions left unanswered. I'm not fond of the screenplay format - the story is short enough that it should have been no mayor chore to re-write it as a short story. As it stands, it's just annoying. I'll give it three stars for the effort, but it really needs some reworking to succed here.

LitCrit, thanks for the review. I’d had suspicions that this wasn’t really the right home for this story, but I went ahead with it anyway and I think disappointed readers for exactly the reasons you mentioned. It’s helpful to have a better grasp of where I went wrong. Have a good one!