All Comments on 'Loyalty'

Is she ever going to fuck him and get knocked up?

you are one kinky minded wordsmith!

what an interesting approach to brother-sister sister-brother SEX

and that's what it is SEX!

not shy but bold not restrained but set free!

you got a good pen whoever you are!

5 well earned *****!

She should totally let herself get knocked up by him. ♥

That was HOT!!.....Please continue. 5 Stars.

I was a little bothered by her bother's failure at Uni - hoping for just a setback which she could help him overcum.

More please...

I’m not sure what you’re trying for here. The story doesn’t flow. I’m not interested in the characters. I realize you are just starting the story, but maybe develop the characters more. Good luck on your writing.

meh....

No story whatsoever... Please seek out an editor

The beginning of the story started out well. I was hoping for the sister to swoop in and save her brother from making poor choices while they fall in love with each other as time passes. But instead, what I got was a tale about a mentally disturbed sister who is hell bent on destroying her brother instead of lifting him up. There's absolutely nothing redeeming here.

Maybe you have been studying Edgar Allan Poe too much. 1/5

A short story about a perverted sister who raped her little brother in a time of need, absolutely sickening of her. 11/10, please make this a full series.

Good so far. Needs more character development so there needs to be a continuation.

Yeah, this is fucked up in all the right ways, please write more and have her end up pregnant

I need more! I need him to finger her, to make her explode over and over, to fuck, to lick, to suck.. I’m wanking so hard but I need more

You can't leave it on that you have to finish the story continue the sexy saga of sex and depravity