All Comments on 'Lusted Love'

Would love to get some feedback! :)

Good, erotic sex and can imagine more adventures with this couple. Few things detract a bit: Why does a young married couple need to “reconnect”? Why would a couple carry their marriage license with them on a trip? Surprised that husband early in marriage finds wife riding him the most erotic thing he had ever seen. May be I missed something in this tale. Keep writing, however.

A good first submission. An editor might help here and there. Good visual imagery. Could they have names, not initials? Keep writing! Thank you!

Hard to get into characters that don't have names. Do they really have to use that kind of language to turn each other on? A little is ok, but it seemed to be over done after a while.

Thanks for the feedback! It was definitely on a whim that I wrote this. I thought everyone’s feedback so far has been super helpful.

It is refreshing once in a while to have a luxurious, hot steamy story (in and out of the shower) and a bit of outdoor fun involving a married couple, without complicated relationships and other bells and whistles of some other stories. It was disruptive when it slipped into the present tense a few times, for example, with the staff member at the front desk during check-in). I also had trouble with B and K: was it intended to make them anonymous? Anyways, I am grateful: I woke up tired, but your story inspired me to have a quick shower and get back in bed with my wife for a good morning....

a very good relationship, hope they will stay together for long time with lot of fun