All Comments on 'Maid to Order'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 3 years ago
Grammar/spelling

Good story

just a small error

New vs. Old. Those nice pants, yes they are new I got rid of the old ones .

Knew vs. not know - John knew the answer but jack did not know.

lilsubalexlilsubalexover 17 years ago
Not bad...

Hi,

Thanks for the story. One suggestion, if I may. You used the descriptive phrase "19 year old" far too many times. Young, untried, youthful, nearly virginal ... or many other descriptors would have worked.

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