All Comments on 'Making Love with My Sister's Friend'

This one needs a lot of work to make it a readable story.

Obviously you are not a native speaker of English - stick to writing in a language you are competent in. better yet, just stick to reading stories, your writing is nearly unreadable.

In any language

Just plain Crap!!!!

-10

This makes no sense. If I were trying to edit this, I wouldn’t even know how, because none of the grammar makes any sense. You should rewrite this in your native language and post it on a site that has people that can read it there.