All Comments on 'Making of Bambi Ch. 03'

Relatively well-written and erotic. Use of her/my is a bit inconsistent. A lot of good detail, and potential humiliation. Needs to go public soon. Needs further jewelry enhancements and visit to tat parlor.

It a shame I have to wait 3 weeks for the next chapter. It very good story, though I'm a bit confused about the watersports, like how can someone consume pee isn't it our toxic waste and will kill you or make you horrendously sick. If there a way which can explain that, that'll be cool. Though this is fantasy, so I guess it alright, though it just stumbles me though when other parts are more detailed and thought.

Loved it so far really looking forward to the next chapter. Hopefully a trip to a tattoo and piercing Parlour is coming

Please pick a perspective. First person, third person, I don't care, but pick one. Otherwise, really good story. Jumping perspective is making it hard to read.

Does he ever do anything to show this isn't what he wants? It's surprising how many guys don't like eating pussy. It's my specialty and I love it. It gets me alot of return pussy. Maybe she won't be so mean if he does a good job at it.