All Comments on 'Marie's Bar and Girl'

'They got the first tee time on one of the two Foxfire courses and played by ourselves.'

'Marie and Fred agreed that we were looking forward to tomorrow's round '

Secondly, there were places where you moved freely from past to present tense.

Thirdly, the story was poor anyway.

I liked the story and I hope there is a chapter two or even three to go with it.

Not as good as ythebadger's stories though.

Thinks he has a bright new idea for a cuck and whorewife story. Same old garbage.