All Comments on 'Mary'

A wonderful erotic first time story.

You've taken on a difficult task (writing an entertaining story in so few words) and carried it off very well. Congratulations.

Delightfully erotic in only 750 — 5 stars. Smiled at how your protagonist comes by her powers of rationalization.

The only drawback here is that the post is only 750 words! I know it's a contest and I'm all for concision, but you'd hold our attention for another 1,000!

Well done so much arousal and eroticism into 759 words

I thought I was not into the Lesbian Sex section until I read this story. This was exquisite.

A powerfully intimate and erotic little story; arousing!

Short, sweet, cute story. I loved it!

It would take me 750 words just to introduce one character. Lol.

Is it truly that easy so simple so overwhelming? ...... But anyway for shure a girl knows what a girls need is and how to satisfy ...... ☺️

The Black Queen and I, Loved "Mary", Please More!

Hallo Bree!

The Black Queen and I, loved your story about "Mary", and yeah it's short but Brilliant hot and sexy, and like I said Love, I think handcuffing a writer with your talent to a maximum of only 750-words is fucking ridiculous... unless it is only the first chapter... is that it, is this the first chapter??

Thank-You, Well Done Love... 5-Stars and 5-Screaming Orgasms,,, Yes!

The Black Queen and Gay Kat..

75, 750, 7,500, or 750,000 words... Doesn't matter. A lady enjoying her first taste of young puss y is always good! Nicely done blondesubies!!

All though I have never had a straight, most of my encounters are from the bar we hang at. Our relationships last weeks or a couple of months before we end up with someone else we were hanging with. Your story got me thinking and if I do say tingling, that I might get serious for a change rather than just fool around all the time.

Damn, writing wise I gotta say this is impressive. Nice job fitting this story into such a tight window. This definitely could use a sequel or expanded version though, the concept is just too hot to not read more.

Great

Enjoy your poems and your prose. Surely this by definition short piece impresses you — you must be smiling. Every word/phrase, movement, touch resonates — truly erotic.

very loving and thoughtful. mary, and our narrator are both so worthy of love.

well written, too.

thank you

robert