All Comments on 'Mary - The English Version'

by Scorpio58

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 9 years ago
Flash stories don''t do too well

I think the problem is the characters so shallow and the story is only sketched out. Case in point, girl tells him she's pregnant and he rips her panties off and starts fucking her. Now even for a fuck buddy, that wasn't what she came for, and there should have been more description than that. Likewise the husband to be...what was going through his mind.

So double the length and it would have been a much better story.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 9 years ago
Wow, you say this like it's a bad thing

how she has managed to insert, half deep, at a party, a bottle of champagne inside her pussy...

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