All Comments on 'Mastering Submission Ch. 02'

Does not hurt the re-write

there's a phone at the end of the bar so she uses her mobile outside?

30,000 dollars (Ch 1) turns into 200,000 pounds (Ch 2)? I'm not sure what that exchange rate is, but it doesn't sound good!

I am thoroughly enjoying this. Can't seem to find the original for comparison, so you must be the "master" of this story!