by sammies_place
a toe-headed newly turned eighteen year old vixen (towheaded)
ran so thick that it ran (6 words - two of them ran)
a feminine vice (vise)
discrete redhead (discreet)
red-heads (redheads)
quarter back (quarterback)
pie eyed (pie-eyed)
Albert's eyes shinned (shined)
Compelling read, I like your style of writing, it always makes you anticipate the next interaction. Beth has a feisty character and I hope she teaches both men a lesson in the end. She obviously has a lot more strength than her Mum. Really looking forward to the next chapter.
Hate the little Brother, fucking perv.
Is the lumberjack thing going to come into the story later?
Great start, hope you make it a long one (story that is).
One thing, when you mention his snake as a cobra, Do you mean a spitting Cobra? :)
Congrats
And I read your Bio, so here's a recipe for you
Carrot Cake:
Ingredients:
1 ¼ cups vegetable oil
4 large eggs
1 ½ tsp baking soda
3 cup sifted flour
1 cup roughly chopped nuts
2 cups castor sugar
2 tsp baking powder
2 cups grated carrots
2 cups mashed bananas
Method:
Mix all ingredients together, blend well
Pour into two well greased loaf pans.
Bake in preheated (180°C/ 350°F) moderate oven until centre springs back.
This cake freezes well.
Enjoy