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by elfminx128

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visioneervisioneerabout 6 years ago

A good first story. I found the overall tone of the dom to be stilted, though I suspect you were trying to make him strict. A suggestion for technical improvement: write consistently in either present of past tense. Your story switches between the two, which is jarring to readers. That said, by all means keep writing.

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A young submissive from the Sunshine Coast in Australia. I have been part of the BDSM lifestyle for quite awhile now. I am bi-curious and I would love the chance to be with a woman. I love to write, in fact I am writing a short novel now. I am only just starting to write ero...