All Comments on '"Mely's" TF Opening up a new Bar Ch. 01'

Great start. I like the fact that you gave a full explanation at the beginning. You need someone to proofread for you because there are a couple of errors such as the word “exited” when I believe you meant excited. Unfortunately our brains know what we want to write so when we proofread ourselves, we skim over words and think they say what our brain thinks it wrote. I can’t wait to see where this goes since it appears very promising. Thanks for all the time and effort and I look forward to your next chapter.

J.D.