All Comments on 'Memorial Day Weekend BBQ'

I wanted to like this, but it was like reading something my my elementary school kids. Editing would go a long way.

5 Stars. I liked it - please continue.

Weigh, not way

Wants, not want's

Apart from that, boring story. Got to the action too fast, and it was mighty convenient that the SIL and niece already had an incestuous relationship and both wanted the main character.

Take your time and build slowly.

myself personally i've did absolutely enjoy completely enjoy seriously enjoy .... tons stories do have

the husband the male getting it on with wife's sister girlfriend's sister .... tons stories do have the husband

the male getting it on with wife's niece girlfriend's niece his niece .... ALMOST ZERO KINDA STORIES HAVE IT

THE HUSBAND THE MALE GETTING IT ON WITH WIFE's SISTER GIRLFRIEND's SISTER - ALONG ALSO

GETTING IT ON WITH WIFE's NIECE GIRLFRIEND's NIECE HIS NIECE - BEING MOTHER BEING DAUGHTER

.... ALSO ZERO KINDA STORIES HAVE SO THE WIFE THE GIRLFRIEND BEING PREGNANT - EVEN SETUP

THINGS HAPPENING .... nicely done perfectly done nicely done perfectly done nicely done perfectly done

.... HOWEVER THOUGH .... coulda make lots longer , coulda made longer descriptions about everything

going down , coulda made things mentioned reasoning that Sarah doesn't care about cheating on

her husband , coulda made things mentioned reasoning that the mother the daughter being Sarah

being Katie so willingly ready get it on each other , coulda made things mentioned the wife the sister

thee aunt so willingly ready allow her sister - along also sister's daughter simply getting it on with husband

with boyfriend .... STILL THOUGH REGARDLESS THOUGH .... absolutely enjoy completely enjoy seriously enjoy

This isn't a bad story, but it does feel a bit rushed. Why is the wife just offering up her sister and niece for him? Why are they so eager for it. If you expand this more, I'd like to see some character building.

IF I DO A LOT OF CAPS LOCK SHOUTING maybe the COMMENTS I MAKE still won't be AS COMPLETE NONSENSE as that fucking illiterate dipshit DOWN BELOW.