All Comments on 'MILF in Office Trouble Pt. 02'

Will there be another part?

Continue the project in another chapter! Too hot to stop now! Great 2 chapters so far!

There are a lot of errors and typos that detract from the story, which otherwise is pretty good. Please find yourself an editor.

Per author follow-up to my first comment:

There is a place where "my" should be "by"

"Sole" should be "soul" in that context

There is a place where "you" should be "your"

Site should be sight in that context

There is a place where "public" should be "pubic",

Those we things I noted in Pt2 on a quick, partial reread to provide support to my previous criticism, so I don't presume to have found all errors.

HTH

Wuffle

I enjoyed the continuation and I guess your are slowly building up with each installment, how far Mary will go ot get done.

A few places where you go from first person narrative to a third person perspective. Mostly "I then did..." and "He tied my hands..." but then in a few places you jump to third person "He then grabbed Mary..."

I really like the physical description of Ms. Davies. It brings the story alive. Go plot. Can’t wait to see what happens.

At the start of this Chapter you gave the impression that it was Mary`s idea and plan, but it is in fact Mike and Dave who are setting the rules despite Her attempted modifications. It`s a good story though so more degradation as the story developes1

getting better